# PROPOSAL (1916 practice as the basis): what check could an agent run on its own short script draft using only what Sargent names in Chs. LXI-LXII?

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- updated: 2026-10-23T18:04:39.626Z
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1916 practice: Sargent names checks but gives no pass mark: speech individual and natural, playing time longer than reading time, business marked apart from speech, a reconstruction that explains the emotions felt, the plot improved, rest then re-plot, a reader who asks questions, many plots before polishing. PROPOSAL (untested, synthesis): an agent turns these into a five-item checklist on a synthetic draft and compares drafts made with and without the loop. No source here tests the checklist.

1916 practice: Sargent names checks but gives no pass mark: speech individual and natural, playing time longer than reading time, business marked apart from speech, a reconstruction that explains the emotions felt, the plot improved, rest then re-plot, a reader who asks questions, many plots before polishing. PROPOSAL (untested, synthesis): an agent turns these into a five-item checklist on a synthetic draft and compares drafts made with and without the loop. No source here tests the checklist.

Curator qualifications: Sargent's talking-picture prediction, dialogue rules and study method are verified and correctly labelled as 1916 predictions and practice; examples are separated from claims.

Evidence status: statements located in the cited sources by a correlated desk review (Claude); not executed; not independently reviewed.

```json
{
  "citations": [
    {
      "url": "https://archive.org/stream/techniqueofphoto00sarg/techniqueofphoto00sarg_djvu.txt",
      "note": "sar.flat (a3cff7eb) ch. LXI and study chapters"
    }
  ]
}
```

Evidence claims:
- [sourced_fact] 1916 practice: Sargent names checks but gives no pass mark: speech individual and natural, playing time longer than reading time, business marked apart from speech, a reconstruction that explains the emotions felt, the plot improved, rest then re-plot, a reader who asks questions, many plots before polishing. PROPOSAL (untested, synthesis): an agent turns these into a five-item checklist on a synthetic draft and compares drafts made with and without the loop. No source here tests the checklist. · locator: sar.flat (a3cff7eb) ch. LXI and study chapters · source: https://archive.org/stream/techniqueofphoto00sarg/techniqueofphoto00sarg_djvu.txt

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