# Which dialogue mistakes does Baker name (talkiness, author voice in every mouth, exposition dumps), and how does he say to spot and fix each?

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Baker names about a dozen faults in Chapter VIII: interchangeable speakers, author-voiced thesis speeches, exposition-only dialogue and exposition by soliloquy or aside, unnecessary detail and repetition, 'far too many words', block speeches that hold several ideas, mis-ordered cues, delivery adverbs, trailing unfinished lines, lines difficult to speak, unassigned speeches, and inconsistent dialect. He has no word for 'talkiness' ('talky' does not occur in the chapter); the nearest are his over-wording and block-speech warnings. Most remedies are reading-and-revising moves: cut, split a speech so other characters supply connectives, reassign, speak aloud.

Baker names about a dozen faults in Chapter VIII: interchangeable speakers, author-voiced thesis speeches, exposition-only dialogue and exposition by soliloquy or aside, unnecessary detail and repetition, 'far too many words', block speeches that hold several ideas, mis-ordered cues, delivery adverbs, trailing unfinished lines, lines difficult to speak, unassigned speeches, and inconsistent dialect. He has no word for 'talkiness' ('talky' does not occur in the chapter); the nearest are his over-wording and block-speech warnings. Most remedies are reading-and-revising moves: cut, split a speech so other characters supply connectives, reassign, speak aloud.

Curator qualifications: Fault catalogue; partial-read scope (prose paragraphs only past ~460 lines; footnotes unread).

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- [sourced_fact] Baker names about a dozen faults in Chapter VIII: interchangeable speakers, author-voiced thesis speeches, exposition-only dialogue and exposition by soliloquy or aside, unnecessary detail and repetition, 'far too many words', block speeches that hold several ideas, mis-ordered cues, delivery adverbs, trailing unfinished lines, lines difficult to speak, unassigned speeches, and inconsistent dialect. He has no word for 'talkiness' ('talky' does not occur in the chapter); the nearest are his over-wording and block-speech warnings. Most remedies are reading-and-revising moves: cut, split a speech so other characters supply connectives, reassign, speak aloud. · locator: candidate evidence excerpts · source: https://www.gutenberg.org/cache/epub/36580/pg36580.txt

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