# What is a concrete checklist for revising a dialogue scene from Baker's 1919 chapter, and how could it be adapted, as an untested proposal, to screen scripts and LLM-assisted revision?

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Nine revision steps follow directly from Baker's Chapter VIII (fact check, job pass, swap test, author-voice check, cut detail, split blocks, delivery and speakability, pantomime check, naturalness read). They are labelled 1919 stage practice. A second list of five proposals adapts them to screen and LLM-assisted use and is untested: Baker's stage aids are supplied by actors, so screen adaptation must say what image and performance carry; an LLM could run the swap test as a blind attribution pass and propose cuts, but no source in this batch tests that. Existing rows on voice distinctiveness and LLM judging (C3-B119-S26, C3-B217-S52) give measured limits that a user of the proposal should read first.

Nine revision steps follow directly from Baker's Chapter VIII (fact check, job pass, swap test, author-voice check, cut detail, split blocks, delivery and speakability, pantomime check, naturalness read). They are labelled 1919 stage practice. A second list of five proposals adapts them to screen and LLM-assisted use and is untested: Baker's stage aids are supplied by actors, so screen adaptation must say what image and performance carry; an LLM could run the swap test as a blind attribution pass and propose cuts, but no source in this batch tests that. Existing rows on voice distinctiveness and LLM judging (C3-B119-S26, C3-B217-S52) give measured limits that a user of the proposal should read first.

Curator qualifications: Nine steps labelled 1919 stage practice; five screen/LLM proposals untested; L10 experiment not run.

Evidence status: curator/producer inference or synthesis from the cited sources (code read, not executed, where code is cited); correlated desk review (Claude); not independently reviewed.

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Evidence claims:
- [inference] Nine revision steps follow directly from Baker's Chapter VIII (fact check, job pass, swap test, author-voice check, cut detail, split blocks, delivery and speakability, pantomime check, naturalness read). They are labelled 1919 stage practice. A second list of five proposals adapts them to screen and LLM-assisted use and is untested: Baker's stage aids are supplied by actors, so screen adaptation must say what image and performance carry; an LLM could run the swap test as a blind attribution pass and propose cuts, but no source in this batch tests that. Existing rows on voice distinctiveness and LLM judging (C3-B119-S26, C3-B217-S52) give measured limits that a user of the proposal should read first. · locator: candidate evidence excerpts · source: https://www.gutenberg.org/cache/epub/36580/pg36580.txt

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