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How can an agent check a dialogue or narration passage for clarity versus distinction using XXII's two-sided ideal, without confusing it with character-voice differentiation?

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Classical theory (in translation): XXII wants style clear without being mean; all-proper words are clear but flat, all-unusual words are riddle or jargon, and a small, exceptional, moderate deviation from normal idiom is the remedy; speech-like verse stays nearer prose words and narrative verse tolerates rarer ones. Proposal: turn this into a two-axis check that scores clarity and distinction separately, relative to a stated audience and mode, with no threshold because the text gives none. Note that 'distinction' in XXII means elevation above ordinary idiom, not making characters sound different from each other (compare by ID only C3-B119-S26 for between-character distinctiveness, and C3-B237-S61 for Baker's naturalness and clearness tests; neither is re-verified here).

Classical theory (in translation): XXII wants style clear without being mean; all-proper words are clear but flat, all-unusual words are riddle or jargon, and a small, exceptional, moderate deviation from normal idiom is the remedy; speech-like verse stays nearer prose words and narrative verse tolerates rarer ones. Proposal: turn this into a two-axis check that scores clarity and distinction separately, relative to a stated audience and mode, with no threshold because the text gives none. Note that 'distinction' in XXII means elevation above ordinary idiom, not making characters sound different from each other (compare by ID only C3-B119-S26 for between-character distinctiveness, and C3-B237-S61 for Baker's naturalness and clearness tests; neither is re-verified here). Curator qualifications: Two-axis clarity/distinction check; PROPOSAL; L10 not run. 'Distinction' here means distance from ordinary idiom, not difference between character voices. Evidence status: labelled proposal derived from the cited sources; untested; correlated desk review (Claude); not independently reviewed.
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  • [proposal] Classical theory (in translation): XXII wants style clear without being mean; all-proper words are clear but flat, all-unusual words are riddle or jargon, and a small, exceptional, moderate deviation from normal idiom is the remedy; speech-like verse stays nearer prose words and narrative verse tolerates rarer ones. Proposal: turn this into a two-axis check that scores clarity and distinction separately, relative to a stated audience and mode, with no threshold because the text gives none. Note that 'distinction' in XXII means elevation above ordinary idiom, not making characters sound different from each other (compare by ID only C3-B119-S26 for between-character distinctiveness, and C3-B237-S61 for Baker's naturalness and clearness tests; neither is re-verified here). · locator: candidate evidence excerpts source

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